All things considered, English appears to be far easier to learn than German.
Appropriate
Instead of using cars, it is much much better to use public transport such as buses, trams, trains, ferries, trolleybuses and so on.
Inappropriate. 'much much better' and 'so on' are not formal. The list is redundant information.
The data indicate that remote work can affect employees’ sense of connection within company culture
APPROPRIATE It focuses on what the data show rather than personal opinion.
The findings suggest that social media use may be linked to higher levels of anxiety among young adults.
APPROPRIATE – It uses suggest and may to hedge the claim, avoids emotional language (“causes anxiety”), and maintains an objective, impersonal tone
It is absolutely crazy that governments can't solve even the tiniest of problems.
Inappropriate. 'crazy and tiniest' not formal language. Don't write 'can't' - no contractions.
This has made a sizeable difference to student engagement
Appropriate
When there is so much sickening poverty in the world, it's incredibly unfair that some people live in luxury.
Inappropriate. Too emotional (sickening poverty) too informal (super angry)
Current projections suggest that rising sea levels could pose significant challenges for coastal cities by 2050.
APPROPRIATE – The phrase current projections suggest signals source-based uncertainty, while could pose significant challenges avoids alarmist language
Survey results show that influencer marketing is becoming an increasingly effective strategy for reaching younger consumers.
APPROPRIATE – It uses the neutral reporting verb show, includes a cautious phrase is becoming, and replaces emotional or absolute phrasing
Prices continue to go up due to inflation
inappropriate - use of phrasal verb
The results appear to support the view that sustainability is an important purchasing factor for Generation Z consumers
Appropiate – appear to to signal interpretation rather than certainty, and it avoids emotive or evaluative words. The tone is analytical and formal.
Many of my friends go to the gym or workout quite frequently.
Inappropriate. Too personal. refer to society, not your friends.
Many people would agree that being a parent can be mundane, stressful and challenging at times. Nevertheless, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
Appropriate
I would love to study abroad, but unfortunately, the costs are too high for me.
Inappropriate. Too personal.
Can politicians be trusted? Or are they more interested in their own careers? Who can say?
Inappropriate. Don't ask questions.
To dismiss popular music as nothing more than light entertainment is to ignore the role it plays in millions of peoples' lives.
Appropriate
There is no point having loads of violence in films and anyways, explicitly violent films are boring too.
Not appropriate. 'anyways, too'. Poor sentence structure.
In general, therefore, we can conclude that, on the whole, television has usually has an overall positive impact.
Inappropriate. Too many irrelevant phrases and commas.
I am going to explain my deep and personal thoughts on this topic and then I shall give you a conclusion.
Inappropriate style and irrelevant information.
Everybody knows the chance of society inhabiting space in the near future is highly unlikely
Inappropriate. Make an inference based on actual research and not what you believe to be general knowledge
Tourism is a big industry. In some ways that is good. In other ways that is bad.
Inappropriate. Too simple
There is considerably more to academic research than investigating facts on the internet.
Appropriate
And the majority of the population, according to Smith (2022) are also beginning to become more aware of their carbon footprint
Inappropriate. Don't start a sentence with 'and'
Unemployment is a difficult subject for me to write about as I have never been unemployed. Apart from when I was 18 and living with my parents.....
Inappropriate. Pointless personal information.
It's heartwarming to see the positive impact access to mental health services has had on the youth of today
Inappropriate. Too emotional
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