B21 Essay Common Errors | Baamboozle - Baamboozle

They think that being watched every time is gratifying

They think that being watched ALL THE time is gratifying

Although, your audience is not close to you at all.

HOWEVER, your audience is not close to you at all.

But there isn’t only advantages, they have some disadvantages too,

But there AREN'T only advantages, THERE ARE some disadvantages too,

If some famous person went to a restaurant he or she would be considerate in another way than if he or she were an unpopular person.

If some famous person went to a restaurant he or she would be TREATED in another way than if he or she were an unpopular person.

Furthermore, you will be exposed to a lot of critics and hate that you will must get used to them.

Furthermore, you will be exposed to a lot of critics and hate that you will HAVE TO get used to.

For example, this is the case of Lionel Messi which works with Adidas.

For example, this is the case of Lionel Messi, WHO works with Adidas.

There a lot of people that would like to be a celebrity but do they really know that being a celebrity means?

There ARE a lot of people that would like to be a celebrity but do they really know WHAT being a celebrity means?

I think that not everything is positive.

I DON'T THINK THAT everything is positive.

If I were famous I could not have a private life and people talk about me.

If I were famous I could not have a private life and people WOULD talk about me

Also I very shy.

I'm also very shy.

I would have privileges, for example enter in place where no one can go or collaborate with my favourites brands.

I would have privileges, for example ENTERING A place where no one can go or COLLABORATING with my FAVOURITE brands.

Being famous is everything that a normal people wants to be in life.

Being famous is everything that a normal PERSON wants to be in life.

On the contrary, there are many advantage.

On the contrary, there are many advantageS.

For example, if a well-known person ask people to do something, everyone who follow him or her would do that.

For example, if a well-known person askS people to do something, everyone who followS him or her would do that.

However, not all are good things.

However, not NOT EVERYTHING IS GREAT.

In addition is very difficult for the celebrities going to public places, because every body can recognise you.

In addition, IT is very difficult for the celebrities TO GO to public places, because every body can recognise THEM.

... but their lifes have many advantages too

...but their LIVES have many advantages too

Many people think about how is the life of a celebrity.

Many people think about WHAT THE LIFE OF A CELEBRITY IS LIKE.

To sump up, be a celebrity has both advantages and disadvantages.

To SUM up, BEING a celebrity has both advantages and disadvantages.