CAE Essays - Exam Mistakes | Baamboozle - Baamboozle

"On the one hand, the education is a fundamental factor, since the quality of it is higher in the city." Mistake?

"On the one hand, education..." (not "the education")

"In addition, when people is young they tend to want to start working" Mistake?

people ARE

"By contrast, cities are more numerous and has more jobs, so it is easier to get an interview."

"cities.....HAVE more jobs".

"Having an economic stability is the most important thing that young people value" Mistake?

"Having an economic stability" -> "Having economic stability"

"The first topic I will consider is job opportunities." Mistake?

"Topic" is not the best choice when evaluating causes - use the word "factor".

"I still maintain that living in a city is quite better than village life." Mistake?

"Quite better" -> "slightly better" or "somewhat better".

"One of the hottest issues nowadays is the preference of the young people to live in cities rather than.." Mistake?

"Hottest issues" is very informal - better to say "controversial issues".

"Moreover, the education in the villages is limited, not everybody has the possibility to assist to the school." Mistake?

"Not everybody has the possibility of ATTENDING school"

"On the other hand, the big majority of parents believe that cities are much more developed.." Mistake?

"The big majority" -> "A large majority" or "An overwhelming majority"

"To sum up, the lifestyle of young people is to be citizens of an urban place, but in a future..." Mistake?

In THE future.

"The first factor that influence to the decision to live in a city." Mistake?

"Influences to". Correction: "the first factor that influences the decision...."

"This is totally understandable when we consider the opportunities to work and study." Mistake?

"Totally" is very informal.

"Moreover, job offer in villages has been drastically reduced in the last few decades". What's the mistake?

"The job offer." This phrase exists, but it means a single offer made by one employer (e.g. after interview) not the general possibilites of work.

"Thus, big cities allow youth to course, for instance, film or dance studies." What's the mistake? Can you suggest a correction?

We don't have a verb "to course". "To pursue" would be the best substitute here.

"Really" is formal enough for essays - true or false?

False - really is VERY informal.

Instead of saying "he or she" when you want to refer to non-specific person, you can say.........

They. E.g. "A doctor has to complete five years of training. They also need to....."