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[Spot the error] The story centers on Katrina: a lone fighter pilot who flies over the baron wasteland of what used to be an ocean.
[Incorrect use of colon] The story centers on Katrina, a lone fighter pilot who flies over the baron wasteland of what used to be an ocean.
[Spot the error] She flips a few switches, drops some yellow die onto a cloud and suddenly, rain falls.
[Spelling / Wrong Word] She flips a few switches, drops some yellow dye onto a cloud and suddenly, rain falls.
[Spot the error] The dogfight scenes were carrying a thrill to them that evoke Steven Spielberg at the height of his abilities as a visual storyteller.
[Tense] The dogfight scenes carry a thrill to them that evoke Steven Spielberg at the height of his abilities as a visual storyteller.
[Spot the error] Writer-Director Lucas Martell and his team of animators and editors have clearly studied the best action sequences in order to give the viewer a realized perfectly geography of the dogfights.
[Incorrect word order] ... to give the viewer a perfectly realized geography of the dogfights.
[Spot the error] It does all this under the conviction of an environmental message about water conversation, but it does not preach or beat anyone over the head with an agenda.
[Spelling / Wrong word] ... water conservation ...
[Spot the error]Aside from a cheer, “The OceanMaker” has not one single line of dialogue, it lets the emotions expressed on Katrina’s face tell the bigger story while also perfectly underscoring the importance of the events through action.
[Comma splice] Aside from a cheer, “The OceanMaker” has not one single line of dialogue. It lets the emotions expressed ...
[Spot the error] Martell also deserves special props for hiring a full orchestra to performing the score instead of hiring one person to compose it digitally, a rare feat for a short film.
[Word form: perform] Martell also deserves special props for hiring a full orchestra to perform the score instead of hiring one person to compose it digitally,
[Spot the error] A lighthouse stood among submarines and freighters stuck in sand, the sun beating down on them mercilessly and with only a couple clouds in the sky.
[Tense] A lighthouse stands among submarines and freighters stuck in sand, the sun beating down on them mercilessly and with only a couple clouds in the sky.
[Spot the error] It appears that rain has not fallen in quite some time, but Katrina has created a machine that could get a rain shower going again, all she needs is a cloud to fly over.
[Comma splice] ... but Katrina has created a machine that could get a rain shower going again. All she needs ...
[Spot the error] While perfectly underscoring the importance of the events through action: The emotions expressed on Katrina’s face tell the bigger story.
[Subordinate clause] While perfectly underscoring the importance of the events through action, the emotions expressed on Katrina’s face tell the bigger story.
[Spot the error] Lots of little touches give the animation the amazing realism, such as the cracked lenses in the binoculars, the weathered planes, and the debris on the floor bed of the ocean.
[Unnecessary article: the] Lots of little touches give the animation amazing realism, ...
[Spot the error] My only quibble is that the cartoonish facial features of the characters seem out of place against the realism of the landscape, this detracted from the sombre story and made me feel less interested in the fate of the pilot
[Comma splice] ... seem out of place against the realism of the landscape; This detracted from the sombre story ...
[Spot the error] Captured with gorgeous cinematography and absolutely beautiful animation, and it features some awesome aerial dogfighting action and a perfect score that heightens the emotions in all the right ways.
[Subordinate clause] Captured with gorgeous cinematography and absolutely beautiful animation, it features some ...
[Spot the error] Captured with gorgeous cinematography and absolutely beautiful animation, and it features some awesome aerial dogfighting action and a perfect score that heightens the emotions in all the right ways.
[Conjunction after subordinate clause] Captured with gorgeous cinematography and absolutely beautiful animation, it features some ...
