The icing of the cake was that he didn't even had a plan; he just went for it.
The icing on the cake was that he didn't even have a plan; he just went for it.
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From there it boomed; from the fish pen to a unique door knob to a camping stove to a generator to a snowmobile to a van until eventually he was offered a role in a movie for a snowglobe
Punctuation: : or dash after boomed.
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From a red paper clip to a house on Main street in the tiny town of Kipling in Saskatchewan province - a place he has never been to before. t
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His selfless, thoughtful and modest behavior have brought many people an inspiration that nothing is impossible if one has determination.
Tautology: selfless/thoughtful / has brought ....inspiration (no an)
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You'd remember him for the incredible trade project that he had accomplished, making the biggest trade of his life, trading a paperclip for a house.
You would/repetition of 'trade' / launched/started (not accomplished)
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Needless to say, there were of course naysayers who things that he will not be able to accomplish what he started.
Needless to say, there were of course naysayers who thought that he would not be able to accomplish what he has started.
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Let's catch up with the guy everyone is talking about, the red paperclip guy who got a house from a paperclip and whom we are honoured to have with us today.
punctuation/'got' / style
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With no real expectations, Kyle said he decided to post the paperclip on Craig's list to see how far it can go.
