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What’s wrong with this sentence? I believe this clearly proves that online learning is better than face-to-face classes.
Errors: first person (“I believe”), exaggeration/absolute claim (“clearly proves,” “better than”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? You can easily see that children always learn more quickly than adults.
Errors: second person (“you”), sweeping generalisation (“always”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? There is nothing worse than unemployment!!
Errors: exaggeration (“nothing worse”), exclamation marks (“!!”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? For thousands of people this decision will be a total disaster.
Errors: emotionally charged word (“total disaster”), exaggeration.
What’s wrong with this sentence? Every coin has two sides, so technology is both good and bad.
Errors: cliché (“Every coin has two sides”), vague language (“good and bad”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? This study shows that everyone finds maths difficult.
Errors: sweeping generalisation (“everyone”), overstatement.
What’s wrong with this sentence? We can find out the answer if we look into the data more closely.
Errors: first person plural (“we”), phrasal verbs (“find out,” “look into”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? Kids nowadays can’t survive without their phones.
Errors: colloquial word (“kids”), exaggeration/overstatement (“can’t survive”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? Etc. is often used to show other similar examples.
Errors: abbreviation (“etc.”), informal phrasing.
What’s wrong with this sentence? Don’t forget that education always reduces crime.
Errors: contraction (“don’t”), sweeping generalisation (“always reduces”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? This evidence backs up the idea that the policy will succeed.
Errors: phrasal verb (“backs up”), overstatement (“will succeed”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? It’s hugely important to remember that students never read enough.
Errors: contraction (“it’s”), colloquial/emotive language (“hugely important,” “never read enough”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? What should governments do to solve the housing problem?
Errors: direct question (too conversational), emotionally charged phrasing (“the housing problem”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? You should always remember that lots of people prefer informal writing.
Errors: second person (“you”), colloquial phrase (“lots of”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? I’m sure this proves that social media is bad for society.
Errors: first person (“I’m sure”), emotive word (“bad”), contraction (“I’m”).
What’s wrong with this sentence? The findings show that nobody expected what happened next!!
Errors: exaggeration (“nobody expected”), exclamation marks (“!!”).
