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The cat was on the roof, and I forgot my lunch again, maybe tomorrow will rain because the sky looked kind of orange, and there’s that sound, you know, like when you open a soda but not really, and anyway I think frogs are weird but cute.
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Cilembu sweet potato is a special kind of sweet potato from West Java, Indonesia. It has a unique sweet taste, especially when baked. The skin is light brown, and the inside is yellow and soft. BTS is my favorite boyband.
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Tomatoes? Oh man, they’re like the MVP of the veggie world — well, fruit, whatever. You toss 'em in a salad, slap 'em on a burger, or just munch 'em raw if you're feelin’ wild. Juicy little suckers, right?
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Lettuce is a low-calorie leafy vegetable, with just 15 calories per one hundred grams, making it a popular choice for healthy diets. A typical head of romaine lettuce weighs around 600 gr.
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This particular experiment, research project, or study was officially initiated and commenced by the students during the previous month, which means it began roughly one month ago from the present time.
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Coffee from Puntang is known for its rich and smooth flavor. The beans are carefully grown in the highland plantations, where the climate is perfect for coffee cultivation. I love seblak very much.
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Musa ingens is one of the largest banana species in the world, known for its impressive size and unique characteristics. (What part of abstract is this?)
Background
This research aims to explore the growth, habitat, and uses of Musa ingens to better understand its role in the environment and possible benefits for local communities. (What part of abstract is this?)
Problems ( Aims)
In this research, the writer used a combination of qualitative and quantitative methods to gather comprehensive data. (What part of abstract is this?)
Methods
The results of the research showed that Musa ingens can grow up to 15 meters tall with a pseudostem diameter reaching over 50 centimeters. (What part of abstract is this?)
Results
Point A: High dose of fertilizer | Point B: Large banana flesh (combine those points using the appropriate connecting word)
High dose of fertilizer causes large banana flesh.
Point A: Whitered leaves | Point B: Insufficient water supply (connect those points)
Withered leaves are caused by insufficient water supply
The student of agriculture is examining the ornamental plant, especially orchid. (What kind of relationship is this?)
Addition of ideas - Specifying
Prof. Arief is examining the leaves and flowers of apple plants.(What kind of relationship is this?)
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The lecturers of agriculture faculty are teaching theories of agriculture. Moreover, they also teach how to apply the theory. (What kind of relationship is this?)
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Aloe Vera has so many benefits. For example, Aloe Vera can grow your hair, and cure constipation. (What kind of relationship is this?)
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