Let's talk about some pros and cons of a gap year.
Not really. "Let's" and "talk about" are inapproprite.
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On the other hand, having a year off can be beneficial.
Yes, this is a good one.
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Personally, I would definitely opt for taking a gap year. I am the kind of person who needs to explore all possibilities before deciding on which path is right.
Not really. Even though the vocabulary is advanced, giving your personal examples isn't apprioriate.
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A gap year is an amazing opportunity. You should definitely take it!
Not really. Exclamations (!) and recommendations to the reader should be avoided.
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In my opinion, there are significantly more negatives to the idea of a gap year.
Yep, this one is OK.
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However, a gap year can be a waste of time because some people, especially young school leavers, are just couch potatoes. They would not lift a finger to do anything without their parents' or teachers' control.
This one is inappropriate because of the spoken idioms such as "a couch potato" and "lift a finger".
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So... it's done! The school is over! You-hoo! What next! Go to university? Or maybe take a gap year? :)
You are right: this one is not appropriate.
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Going to university later than yor peers is a huge drawback. There is a lot of stuff you should learn, and losing time would only make it more difficult.
Not really. Spoken words like "huge" and "stuff" should be avoided.
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By taking a break from their studies, young people get the benefit of exploring different fields and gaining useful skills. For instance, they can volunteer as teachers in developing countries ...
This is an appropriate style.
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But, on the other hand, there are some disadvantages. For example, one may face with their parents' pressure. Also, a lack of money can be a problem.
Not really. Linkers like "but" and also" aren't appropriate at the beginning of a sentence.
