5. The writer included the quote 'carcass of a vehicle' to prove that there has been such cases where people die fom falling off the cliff
Avoid word 'quote' / prove? / tense
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lifesaver
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gold
Win 50 points!
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gift
Win 15 points!
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baam
Lose 5 points!
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6. The road and atmosphere is described as dangerous, eerie and lifeless.
is not are
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3. The writer uses a lasting effect of mystery and danger by using vivid, visual imagery, metaphors and personification.
Too general and too vague
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9. In paragraph 3, the writer uses metaphors, imagery and personification whereas in paragraph 6 the writer uses imagery, indirect characterization and similes
Overview: way too general and obtuse / individual characterisation?
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4. Perilous, menacing and life-threatening are words used to describe the road and its surroundings.
Overview statement: tautology and misleading wording (words used to describe)
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7. This evokes an effect that the writer is suffering from poor physical condition
evoke a feeling/sensation/image....not an effect (create/has/gives an effect of)
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8. The phrase " roars echoing" portrays the current of the river hitting against the rocks with great force.
Portrays something as something
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heart
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magnet
Take 10 points!
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fairy
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baam
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thief
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shark
Other team loses 10 points!
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shark
Other team loses 25 points!
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lifesaver
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1. The peril on the road is shown when there is a 'rocky outcrop', with its guttural alliteration affirming its ominous nature
when = through the phrase ; choice of phrase, need to be more explicit between link with alliteration and being ominous
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2. The writer's hopes of finding gold being " swept away by the currrent" strengthens this connection even more, this time all but directly referring to the movement of the water in the river.