There is no point having loads of violence in films and anyways, explicitly violent films are boring too.
Not appropriate. 'anyways, too'. Poor sentence structure.
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Current projections suggest that rising sea levels could pose significant challenges for coastal cities by 2050.
APPROPRIATE – The phrase current projections suggest signals source-based uncertainty, while could pose significant challenges avoids alarmist language
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In general, therefore, we can conclude that, on the whole, television has usually has an overall positive impact.
Inappropriate. Too many irrelevant phrases and commas.
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It is absolutely crazy that governments can't solve even the tiniest of problems.
Inappropriate. 'crazy and tiniest' not formal language. Don't write 'can't' - no contractions.
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This has made a sizeable difference to student engagement
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boom
Lose 50 points!
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Other team loses 10 points!
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Other team loses 15 points!
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Many people would agree that being a parent can be mundane, stressful and challenging at times. Nevertheless, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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Survey results show that influencer marketing is becoming an increasingly effective strategy for reaching younger consumers.
APPROPRIATE – It uses the neutral reporting verb show, includes a cautious phrase is becoming, and replaces emotional or absolute phrasing
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Swap points!
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Take points!
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Give 20 points!
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Prices continue to go up due to inflation
inappropriate - use of phrasal verb
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Can politicians be trusted? Or are they more interested in their own careers? Who can say?
Inappropriate. Don't ask questions.
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The data indicate that remote work can affect employees’ sense of connection within company culture
APPROPRIATE It focuses on what the data show rather than personal opinion.
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I am going to explain my deep and personal thoughts on this topic and then I shall give you a conclusion.
Inappropriate style and irrelevant information.
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The results appear to support the view that sustainability is an important purchasing factor for Generation Z consumers
Appropiate – appear to to signal interpretation rather than certainty, and it avoids emotive or evaluative words. The tone is analytical and formal.
