In general, therefore, we can conclude that, on the whole, television has usually has an overall positive impact.
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Instead of using cars, it is much much better to use public transport such as buses, trams, trains, ferries, trolleybuses and so on.
Inappropriate. 'much much better' and 'so on' are not formal. The list is redundant information.ย
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Tourism is a big industry. In some ways that is good. In other ways that is bad.
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To dismiss popular music as nothing more than light entertainment is to ignore the role it plays in millions of peoples' lives.
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I am going to explain my deep and personal thoughts on this topic and then I shall give you a conclusion.ย
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Can politicians be trusted? Or are they more interested in their own careers? Who can say?
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There is no point having loads of violence in films and anyways, explicitly violent films are boring too.
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When there is so much sickening poverty in the world, it's incredibly unfair that some people live in luxury.
Inappropriate. Too emotional (sickening poverty) too informalย (super angry)
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It is absolutely crazy that governments can't solve even the tiniest of problems.
Inappropriate. 'crazy and tiniest' not formal language. Don't write 'can't' - no contractions.
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I would love to study abroad, but unfortunately, the costs are too high for me.ย
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Unemployment is a difficult subject for me to write about as I have never been unemployed. Apart from when I was 18 and living with my parents.....
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Many people would agree that being a parent can be mundane, stressful and challenging at times. Nevertheless, I believe the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.ย
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All things considered, I believe that English is far easier to learn than German.