With no real expectations, Kyle said he decided to post the paperclip on Craig's list to see how far it can go.
Tenses for reported speech: had decided / could
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Needless to say, there were of course naysayers who thinks that he will not be able to accomplish what he started.
... who thought that he would not be able to accomplish what he started.
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seesaw
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His selfless, thoughtful and modest behavior have brought many people an inspiration that nothing is impossible if one has determination.
has brought inspiration
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From there it boomed; from the fish pen to a unique door knob to a camping stove to a generator to a snowmobile to a van until eventually he was offered a role in a movie for a snow globe.
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You'd remember him for the incredible trade project that he had accomplished, making the biggest trade of his life, trading a paperclip for a house.
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From a red paper clip to a house on Main street in the tiny town of Kipling in Saskatchewan province - a place he has never been to before.
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The icing of the cake was that he didn't even had a plan; he just went for it.
The icing on the cake ...
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Let's catch up with the guy everyone is talking about, the red paperclip guy who got a house from a paperclip and whom we are honoured to have with us today.